Final Draft: Opening Sequence

Evaluation Questions "Who Is Who" Video

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Alternations Along The Way

Alternations from drafts 1 to 5.

Draft 1:

In draft one our opening sequence was set in her room, on the bus and on the road. We used a diary as a prop where she expressed her emotions and the main story was the main character was seeing her evil side everywhere. We also used a black and white effect over the first scene to show that she was having a flashback.

Draft 2:

In draft two we changed two of the locations. We also tried to change the beginning scene as we thought that in the first draft it didn't flow therefore we changed it her going to her room instead of already being there. We continued with the diary as a prop and the story stayed the same, and we kept the black and white effect.

Draft 3:

In draft 3 we kept to the same locations however we had to change the first scene and we took out the diary and instead we had her getting ready for her day out. We also got rid of the black and white effect, but the story remained the same.

However we had some issues and had no time therefore we were unable to finish editing and filming this draft meaning it was left incomplete. 

Draft 4:

In draft 4 we kept the same locations but we changed the last one so that we could include a bus stop and an isolated area. We changed the story completely, as instead of seeing/being followed by her evil self she was now seeing her dead bestfriend. However it was unclear who this girl was which made the opening sequence quite confusing. We tried to use sound effects and some incidental music when the dead girl appeared in order to build up tension and to improve our opening sequence.

Draft 5:

In draft 5 we kept the exact same locations as draft 4. The story was slightly changed as the dead bestfriends costume had been changed and we made it alot more clearer to our audience of who this girl may be through the close ups of the photos you see in the beginning of both the dad bestfriend and the main girl Kathryn. We also used more incidental music and sound effects to emphasise when the dead girl appears, as we found this was what we were lacking and struggling with since draft 1. We also included more close ups of the room to help the audience learn about the main character to show that she is rebellious .

Overall, We are all very happy including myself, with all the changes we have made from drafts 1 to 5 as we feel that our opening sequence is much more clearer to our audience meaning that they understand our storyline we also believe that fixing the music was a big thing we did to improve our opening sequence as it plays a big part in a psychological thriller.

Assignment 34 Draft 5: Shotlist

Assignment 33 Draft 5: Storyboard

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Assignment 32 Draft 5:Script

Assignment 31 Draft 5: Locations

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Assignment 30 Draft 5: Costume And Props

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Assignment 29 Draft 5: Characters And Actors

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Assignment 28 Draft 5: Conventions

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Assignment 27 Draft 5: Timelines

Assignment 26 Draft 5: Enigma In Our Opening Sequence

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Assignment 23 Draft 5:Target Audience

Assessment Record: Opening Sequence Draft 4

Draft 4: Opening Sequence

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Assignment 32 Draft 4:Script

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Assignment 31 Draft 4:Locations

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Assignment 27 Draft 4:Timelines

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Assessment Record:Opening Sequence Draft 3

Draft 3: Opening Sequence

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Assignment 32 Draft 3: Script

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Assignment 31 Draft 3: Locations

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Assignment 29 Draft 3: Character And Actors

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Assignment 27 Draft 3:Timelines

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Assessment Record: Opening Sequence Draft 2

SELF ASSESSMENT
PEER ASSESSMENT	N/A
TEACHER ASSESSMENT
GRADE	The grade I received for this task was     E3____.  This is  below  my target grade of a      B       .
TARGETS TO IMPROVE	To improve this work I need to:  -focus on framing  -lighting problems  -end shot needs to be more clear -more skillful match on action needed

Draft 2: Opening Sequence

Assignment 32 Draft 2 :Script

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Assignment 31 Draft 2:Locations

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Assignment 29 Draft 2: Characters And Actors

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Assignment 27 Draft 2: Timelines

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Assessment Record: Opening Sequence Draft 1

SELF ASSESSMENT	N/A
PEER ASSESSMENT	N/A
TEACHER ASSESSMENT
GRADE	The grade I received for this task was     E3____.  This is below my target grade of a      B       .
TARGETS TO IMPROVE	To improve this work I need to:  -sound errors -difficult costumes -no jump cuts -make story clear

Draft 1: Opening Sequence

Music Research

Assignment 35: Time Management Charts

Assignment 34: Assessment Record

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GRADE	The grade I received for this task was     _B/A___.   This is on  my target grade of a     B        .
TARGETS TO IMPROVE	To improve this work I need to:   -details of location -straight cut some of the handwriting is not clear (type)

Assignment 34: Shotlist

Assignment 33: Assessment Record

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GRADE	The grade I received for this task was    C3__. This is  below my target grade of a      B       .
TARGETS TO IMPROVE	To improve this work I need to:  -close ups and extreme close ups of diary -consider transitions -develop match on action drawings

Assignment 33: Storyboard

Assignment 32: Assessment Record

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TARGETS TO IMPROVE	To improve this work I need to: -scene numbers -title of film -consideration of location

Assignment 32: Script

Assignment 31: Assessment Record

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GRADE	The grade I received for this task was     _B3___.  This is on  my target grade of a      B       .
TARGETS TO IMPROVE	To improve this work I need to: -wider variety of angles. -pictures in location list -use maps for locations

Assignment 31: Locations

Assignment 30: Assessment Record

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GRADE	The grade I received for this task was     _D___. This is  below  my target grade of a       B      .
TARGETS TO IMPROVE	To improve this work I need to:  -more pictures with annotations. -more real pictures -more details - incomplete

Assignment 30: Costume and Props

Assignment 29: Assessment Record

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GRADE	The grade I received for this task was   C3_. This is below  my target grade of a      B       .
TARGETS TO IMPROVE	To improve this work I need to: -natural and simple makeover to vague -before and after look identical -use bullets points in order for the text not to bulky

Assignment 29: Characters & Actors

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TARGETS TO IMPROVE	To improve this work I need to: -think about character types and representation. -what about editing/pace? -make columns more constant

Assignment 28: Conventions

Assignment 27:Assessment Record

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GRADE	The grade I received for this task was     B1___.    This is    below  on  my target grade of a    B         .
TARGETS TO IMPROVE	To improve this work I need to:   - no starring  - titles are rarely at the end - use bullet points